Hi! Don't feel anxious at all about posting in the comm, we're all nice people here! ^_^
I was initially iffy with the format of this drabble, with all the sentences in separate paragraphs, but it hit it was intended that way, and then it all made sense. One thing though is that there are tense changes every paragraph. You might want to keep them all in the present, or all in the past. ^_^
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Date: 2009-07-29 09:33 pm (UTC)I was initially iffy with the format of this drabble, with all the sentences in separate paragraphs, but it hit it was intended that way, and then it all made sense. One thing though is that there are tense changes every paragraph. You might want to keep them all in the present, or all in the past. ^_^