A little first drable of the Hikaru no go Fandom

[ariadne_chan]

Author: Elsie Venegas aka Ariadne chan
Rating: PG
Fandom: Hikarau no go
Disclaimer/Credit: Hikaru no go belongs to Hotta Yumi, and Obata Kakeshi Sensei
Category: Drable
Words count: 121

Title: “Rain”


My last thought was the soft drops of the rain outside beginning to fall...

I hear them so many times in my life and all of them were precious to me.

In front of my eyes like a simultaneous painting changing when one drop face the soil.

I could vividly saw when I first met Sai,

When I came with my decision of give my life to go,

When I forgot my name for a title,

When in the rainy days I used to always play with my sensei, my friend, my everything,

And now when I see Sai departed from me crying like I do,

While my life escape from my mouth…

And drops of my blood spill my precious goban...

Comments

[blue_cage]

Hi! Don't feel anxious at all about posting in the comm, we're all nice people here! ^_^

I was initially iffy with the format of this drabble, with all the sentences in separate paragraphs, but it hit it was intended that way, and then it all made sense. One thing though is that there are tense changes every paragraph. You might want to keep them all in the present, or all in the past. ^_^

[blue_cage]

Goodness, did that comment make me sound like a grammar nazi? D: *hits self with my go board*

[ariadne_chan]

don't worry i'm not english native so i'm trying to do it better every day!!

i change some presents ones for past sentence, i hope is better now

and my intention with the drable is no one knows who is the one who talk until the midle of it (Hikaru or Shuzaku)